Below are a few revisions I made for non-profit human rights group Awaken INC. website content.
Re-writings of website:
3 part mission:
Old: We have a long-term vision to create a restorative community. This will include: 1. A community of homes for survivors 2. Physical, mental and spiritual care 3. Education and employment opportunities 4. Transitional home(s) for those ready to be on their own.
Revised: We have a long-term goal to create a restorative community for sex trafficking survivors. Awaken believes in holistic healing including: housing, physical and spiritual care, access to education, and employment opportunities.
Old: We work closely with local law enforcement to help victims escape “the life”.
When a victim needs help, law enforcement contacts us and we are there to provide: 1. A safe place to stay while we plan the next steps 2. Food and clothing 3. LifePacks
Revised: Awaken works closely with law enforcement to help victims escape sex trafficking. Through this partnership we help provide LifePacks and safe houses.
Old: Lasting change in the area of sex trafficking will only happen when our hearts are turned to Jesus. We pray that God would change our city into a place of healing and hope; a place of refuge and safety.
Revised: (Our hope for this city is in the name, Awaken.)← Could be taken out
Our prayer for this area is to awaken to the extent of the issue that sex trafficking is, and that God would turn our city into a place of hope and refuge
Old: Awaken INC (In the Name of Christ) is a Christian human rights organization
based in Reno, seeking to combat the commercial, sexual exploitation and trafficking of women and children throughout Nevada. Our mission is two-fold: 1. Raise the Issues > Awareness: “It is already the hour for you to awaken from sleep.” In order to effectively advocate for social change, we seek to provide Nevadans with a comprehensive knowledge of the issues surrounding sexual exploitation and human trafficking, especially when under the guise of legalized prostitution. 2. Raise Your Voice
> Advocacy: “Therefore let us lay aside the deeds of darkness and put on the armor of light.” We believe that the next step in seeing real change happen in our community, is by 1) actively engaging in prayer, asking God to use us, His people, to help bring rescue and restoration to those who are need; and 2) to lobby to our state government officials to enact and enforce laws that will protect the victim and hold their perpetrator accountable for their crimes.
Awaken INC (In the Name of Christ) is a Christian human rights organization based
in Reno, seeking to combat the commercial, sexual exploitation and trafficking of
women and children throughout Nevada. First is through advocacy and raising awareness. Secondly we are here to provide direct resources to help victims see a way out.
(Or “out of ‘the life’” perhaps?)
Your donations make a huge impact in aiding our outreach efforts to raising
awareness and advocacy, and in ensuring that each victim rescued from sexual
exploitation and human trafficking is properly cared for. Currently, we are
accepting donations that will go toward staffing Awaken INC and the future
purchasing and development of a safe house that will provide immediate relief,
restoration, and tools for reintegration into society.
Your donations make a huge impact in aiding our outreach efforts. We are
accepting donations to further support staffing, the current and future safe
houses, restorative services for victims, and tools for reintegration into society.
The Professional Network (TPN) is a collaboration of volunteers, activists, prayer
warriors, intercessors, churches, counselors, doctors, nurses, photographers,
social workers, attorneys, law enforcement, tattoo artists, musicians, artists,
missionaries, business owners, stay-at-home mom’s, citizens, and freedom
fighters all expecting to win the fight against sex trafficking. We believe God is
raising up His army to take this city back and stand in the gap for these women
and children. Would you like to join His army? Please complete the form below if
you are interested in joining us in the fight against sex-trafficking and we will be
in touch soon. Thanks!
Revised: The Professional Network (TPN) is a collaboration of volunteers, including everyone from attorneys to freedom fighters on board to win this battle against sex trafficking. These professionals provide their services and talents to these victims free of charge, such as tattoo artists to provide free tattoo cover-ups as a part of the healing process, or attorneys providing free legal services for these women and children.
We believe God is raising up His army to take this city back. Would you like to join His army? Please complete the form below if you are interested in joining our professional network in the fight against sex trafficking.
Original Publish Date: December 2013